Re: poetry

On Tue, 19 Sep 2000, Matt McLauchlin wrote:

> Have you written any poetry in your conlangs?
Yup.  I don't make any claim to poetic ability, though.

> Here are two of mine.
>
> "Subj"
[snip]

Quite lovely stuff!

A couple conculture-related attempts:

Kaqanen maroni rasa
sjaraínu sejama habazad
qiraízu dichaíku haraya
i hanir hicharad habezana

Semi-direct translation:
Death's many faces
first snow (at)-battlefield
last bloody stain
once salutes (a) soldier

Less direct and better translation:
Death has many faces:
The battlefield's first snow
The heart's last stain of blood
A soldier salutes once.

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nin hebaze sjabemana hanachis
nabesana naíyi ris
bara baraqis

Semi-direct translation:
our weapons night hid
enemy we watched
dawn red

Less direct and better translation:
Night hid our spears
We watched for the enemy
The day dawned red.

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<rueful look>  I'm trying for a haiku or sijo-like feel, though I doubt I
succeeded; haiku isn't something I ever anticipate doing right.

And then there's the first 30 lines of creation myth, which I've
submitted for the phonological relay.  Since I doubt it'll make it, I'll
post it some other time.  :-)

YHL